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Daddy, am I pretty?

"Daddy, daddy look at me!"
She laughed and twirled around
Dressed up in her dress-up clothes.
Daddy didn't make a sound. 

"Daddy, daddy look at me."
She told him once again.
"Daddy, am I pretty?" 
Asked she, feeling empty within. 

"Yes." said daddy flatly
Though look he never did.
She ripped off all the clothes,
Ran to her room and hid.

Daddy never came 
To ever see if she was fine. 
In her floor she laid.
All she could do was cry. 

Daddy didn't love her;
She knew that in her heart.
It's not right for a five year old
To feel broken, torn apart. 

Although too many years have passed 
The story's still the same.
I called only when I needed him
But daddy never came.

Now my dreams are haunted 
With that broken little girl
And her horrid misconception of
The best daddy in the world. 
Sometimes all you need is a good cry and your tears become ink for the pen called writers block. (It makes sense. Don't think too hard. If it doesn't, I've not slept in the past few days and ran out of coffee.)
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Quynn Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Its funny i never had a good relationship with my father but i hope that if i ever have children it can be different
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AussieDidge Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I can only be so thankful my father raised me well throughout my childhood, now the time is coming to pay him back for everything's he done: through busting my ass working so we can take trips together, if I'm hopeful enough to have him around in my later life.

I am so sorry you never got to experience that same devotion and love from your father... Some people can truly be heartless sometimes. I can only wish you well in moving on, and of course, there's always the sweet feeling you'll get when he asks you for something to help him out, and you can ask him exactly that very question... why he never helped you out. Make that worm squirm. :plotting:

Great emotional poetry and certainly inspiring for any would-be poet who wishes to write in that field. Keep up the good work. =)
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914four Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It does, no excuses required. :hug:
“Never explain anything.” - H.P. Lovecraft
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CognoviUmbras Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks ^_^
I like the quote. Ive never heard it before.
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914four Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I collect quotes, I enjoy finding an appropriate bit of wisdom for various situations.
An alternate for this situation could have been the quote below, but I like the brevity of the former :-)
"Never explain - your friends do not need it and your enemies will not believe you anyway." -Elbert Hubbard
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Andharian Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Student General Artist
My dad is the best dad in the world, so it makes me feel even worse for those of you that can't feel that.
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CognoviUmbras Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad you had that experience but please don't feel bad; It made me the person I am today (which is not bad in the least) thank you though and thanks for leaving a comment. ^_^
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Andharian Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Student General Artist
Oh no problem. I suppose, it made me the person I am today too, but obviously, in a different way xD
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x-x-Bear-x-x Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This got me right in the feels.
I also found your use of a rhyming schematic to be very well used.
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CognoviUmbras Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad you felt something but I'm sorry it is sadness or loss or if it ripped open something.
Thanks a bunch and also thanks for commenting. ^_^ *Hugs you*
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this does hit the emotional buttons. hope it's not a true story, although, truth be told, this story is reality for so many (sigh). you might like my take on "Butterfly Rising," and "The power of love."
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CognoviUmbras Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Unfortunately it is but that's okay because it made me the person that I am today. Thanks for leaving a comment. ^_^
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Scrubbels Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
;-; this is amazing. And...made me cry.
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CognoviUmbras Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. Sorry for your tears. *Hugs you..."
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Scrubbels Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
-hugs back- the tears were worth it ;v;
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ReinaHW Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013   Writer
I can relate to this somewhat, me and my dad have never seen eye to eye. He tended to expect me to be a son without realising that inside that little boy was a little girl longing for him to see her.
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CognoviUmbras Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm not sure what to say... I'm sorry just...doesn't feel appropriate. *Hugs You*
Thank you for leaving a comment. I hope your dad will understand weather that means tomorrow or next Thursday but I hope he comes around. Until then, keep being you and although you dont know me, if you ever need someone to talk to, I'm here. Praying for you. ^_^
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ReinaHW Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013   Writer
My dad's pretty narrow minded, my mum's worried that if he learns that I'm trans-gender and seeking the hormone treatments and surgery that it will be a fatal shock for him, so it's always having to be kept quiet and I always have to pretend to be male around him, makes me sick.
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013
I like it. The poem is emotional and beautiful with good rhythm. the theme was especially good. Awesome :D
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CognoviUmbras Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much for reading, and leaving a comment. Thank you also for liking it. It makes me happy to know that someone really reads this stuff. :)
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TiniEve Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I can relate to this uhg
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CognoviUmbras Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
*Hugs you...*
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TiniEve Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*hugs*
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Susu1989 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know this feelings. My father didn't came when i needed him...
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CognoviUmbras Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
*Hugs you...*
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Susu1989 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*hugs back*
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AmaryllisFlower Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013
D,= Right in the feels
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CognoviUmbras Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww... Don't cry. Thanks for leaving a comment. ^_^
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